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Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - master_mind_xx - 02-24-2023
Name of Faction: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate
Number of Members (Minimum of 5): 22
Type Of Faction (Family, Triad, Street Gang, etc): Syndicate
Ethnic Background (ex: Italian, Greek, African American, Irish, etc): Russian
Name of Character running the faction: Dimitri "Pakhan" Molchalin
Your Discord # (ex: gamer#4210): MaSTeR MiND xX#0346
Your SteamID: Steam 0:1:178394927
Your Server playtime: 3 weeks 13 hours 17 minutes
Do you acknowledge and agree to all faction rules as detailed on the server rules page? (Yes/No): Yes
Do you acknowledge that your faction discord will be owned and managed by the official DVN account? (Yes/No): Yes
Organization Backstory (Min. of 250+ Words & any images): https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ae_rHlZqnAh_HHficZ4oxxUcfhGb_Z6Um-75XwA7wN4/edit?usp=sharing
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - NovaLuna - 02-25-2023
+/- Your faction seems alright, but the backstory is a little hard to follow, I would suggest going back over it and trying to simplify some things, because there's a lot of repetition, and it starts to get a little hard to read towards the end.
On top of that, the story seems a little typical, like there isn't much to see. A young Russian thug goes to prison, and eventually ends up in New York to try again. While there isn't anything wrong with that, it is not particularly interesting.
You're basically making the "Hot-Headed fat Italian mob boss," but in the Russian version. I recommend trying to think of some unique motivation or backstory, something that will make people wonder what you will do, because right now, it's no big mystery.
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - Grif69 - 02-25-2023
+1 Faction Story Is long And Detailed
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - CharlesSKS - 02-26-2023
-1 Backstory isn't as interesting as most Russian factions that have applied for this server. An example... https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ktGafGiwnahmdXuLv5Kfbrgqp9ZKQpgz78SZ2YEacN4/edit?usp=sharing
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - ChewieJewie - 02-26-2023
+rep, Well thought out backstory.
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - Datboi260 - 02-26-2023
+1 faction application is detailed THIS TIME. Huge improvement.
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - Yuki - 02-28-2023
honestly +1 it looks really good and it could 100% bring some good rp to the server
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - KOSS Evolution - 02-28-2023
+1 we honestly need more diversity
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - Elapsed_Data - 02-28-2023
+1
I think this faction would be a great addition to the server. Really great backstory and this would bring great RP.
RE: Ruka Pomoshchi Syndicate Faction Application - icantfightok - 02-28-2023
+1 Story's good but hard to read, (personally I don't see that as a problem) Also its another faction that isn't Italian or triad etc, And there's more diversity in having factions like this.