06-13-2023, 09:02 PM
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I think you need to work on your backstory a little bit, give some examples of crimes, the history of the gang getting together, the struggles and triumphs that you have been through. It kind of reads as a general overview of any typical faction.
As well as this, I believe your play time is a little low for the responsibility of running an organisation.
All the best though, i'd like to re-read if you do make some amendments.
I think you need to work on your backstory a little bit, give some examples of crimes, the history of the gang getting together, the struggles and triumphs that you have been through. It kind of reads as a general overview of any typical faction.
As well as this, I believe your play time is a little low for the responsibility of running an organisation.
All the best though, i'd like to re-read if you do make some amendments.
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