02-24-2023, 05:52 AM
(This post was last modified: 02-24-2023, 05:52 AM by NovaLuna. Edited 1 time in total.)
Hey Davey! I like your idea, having a street-cult-thug thing, but unfortunately, as others have stated, the backstory is somewhat lackluster and unformatted. If you did a Google document and put in a solid bit of time to format and make it much more appealing, I feel you would have a better chance.
Also, I am not one to talk, but your play time is really low for the standard.
Making an interesting story is essential, and to be completely honest, your story isn't interesting or captivating, you basically state that "I am popular, and I want to create crime and make money," and while that may be true, that is not going to seem unique or beneficial to the faction environment. Consider it this way, there are many vying for a faction, so what makes your group worth the spot?
I see the need for more street gangs, but you seem to need more time to really figure out how to execute your idea.
(also # of members means how many do you have NOW, not what your limit would BE)
Also, I am not one to talk, but your play time is really low for the standard.
Making an interesting story is essential, and to be completely honest, your story isn't interesting or captivating, you basically state that "I am popular, and I want to create crime and make money," and while that may be true, that is not going to seem unique or beneficial to the faction environment. Consider it this way, there are many vying for a faction, so what makes your group worth the spot?
I see the need for more street gangs, but you seem to need more time to really figure out how to execute your idea.
(also # of members means how many do you have NOW, not what your limit would BE)