03-04-2023, 01:52 AM
(This post was last modified: 03-04-2023, 01:53 AM by NovaLuna. Edited 1 time in total.)
+/- the backstory is fine STORY wise, but the grammar and formatting is pretty hard to deal with.
Play time is very good, so that's a plus.
I recommend revisiting the backstory and formatting it out and fixing the grammatical errors.
PS in your application, you list the two lead characters as "Fredrik Grimsurd" and "Ivar 'The Ripper' Grimsrud". I assume you accidentally misspelled Grimsrud for Fred?
All that being said, Norwegians sound like an interesting dynamic, and I think it would be interesting to see!
Play time is very good, so that's a plus.
I recommend revisiting the backstory and formatting it out and fixing the grammatical errors.
PS in your application, you list the two lead characters as "Fredrik Grimsurd" and "Ivar 'The Ripper' Grimsrud". I assume you accidentally misspelled Grimsrud for Fred?
All that being said, Norwegians sound like an interesting dynamic, and I think it would be interesting to see!