03-04-2023, 02:41 PM
-1
I think diversity is good for faction applications but as stated previously, the story is quite difficult to read. I think in the story, you've tried to pad it out as much as possible but without offering any substance to it. I think you have some good ideas but it needs to be re-visted. If you went back and rewrote the story using the one you have now as a guide I'd be tempted to change my post to a +1 for sure
I think diversity is good for faction applications but as stated previously, the story is quite difficult to read. I think in the story, you've tried to pad it out as much as possible but without offering any substance to it. I think you have some good ideas but it needs to be re-visted. If you went back and rewrote the story using the one you have now as a guide I'd be tempted to change my post to a +1 for sure
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