03-26-2023, 08:38 PM
(03-26-2023, 01:20 PM)Mr Goldstein Wrote: I apologise to you both. I had it written very clearly and concise but the forums made it difficult to read. I am unsure of how to amend it, but I will try.
I really like how you reformed it!
A +1 for me, but I do want to say that perhaps you should add more personality beyond the drug dealings/weapons smuggling of the faction. Perhaps a unique motivation for the leader, or change a bit of the background to put him into a unique situation.